The yellow fog that rubs its back upon the window-panes The yellow smoke that rubs its muzzle on the window-panes Licked its tongue into the corners of the evening, Lingered upon the pools that stand in drains, Let fall upon its back the soot that falls from chimneys, Slipped by the terrace, made a sudden leap, And seeing that it was a soft October night, Curled once about the house, and fell asleep.
What the Heck is That Anyway? Bring her on and let her scream. However, there are a few tricks of the trade that can help.
Telling is abstract, passive and less involving of the reader. It slows down your pacing, takes away your action and pulls your reader out of your story. Showing, however, is active and concrete; creating mental images that brings your story -- and your characters -- to life.
Showing is interactive and encourages the reader to participate in the reading experience by drawing her own conclusions.
Basically, anything ending in -ly is an adverb. First off, you should never modify "said" with an adverb. Second, keep adverb use to a minimum. The pages ruffled open, the names inside seeming exposed and vulnerable against the stark black leather. Dan got to his feet, moving so fast his chair skidded against the floor and dented the new drywall.
Do you see the details in the second example?
Nowhere did I use the word "angrily" or even "angry. Avoid the forms of this verb -- am, is, are, was, was being, will have been, could have been, et al. These not only put you in the passive tense much of the time, but they also tend to remove your reader from the action.
The room was perfect. She saw it and was immediately transported back to her childhood because it had all the elements she remembered.
She threw open the wide oak door and stepped into a past from twenty years ago. The bedroom she remembered, down to the last detail. Pink candy-striped walls with white trim. A thick white shag carpet, two plush maroon velvet chairs flanking a silent fireplace.
An enormous canopy bed, draped with a sheer white veil. Linda pressed a hand to her mouth. What were the chances? Granted, I took a little poetic license with the rules of grammar, but you can do that.
You can "see" the room now, though. You can feel it, too, I hope. You can see the details that bring her back to the past, rather than just being told that it does. This gives the reader something concrete to visualize and connect with.
Think of all the things you can use to describe heat. Make a list, if you want. Write a few sentences that SHOW the weather is hot.
Starting with As or -Ing: Again, as with all of the other examples, this is not a do or die rule either. However, in general, you should avoid starting a sentence with an "As" or "-ing" construction. Rapping at the door, Elaine made her presence known to the people inside the house.
Elaine formed a tight fist with her right hand and pounded on the unforgiving oak. Do you see the tighter imagery in the second example? Removing that -ing construction really helps. The same principle applies with "As" constructions.Creative Writing Show vs.
Tell. Presents C o l r a d o S p ri n g s Fiction W t e r s G r o u p. est. Anyone who has ever taken a creative writing course or picked up a book on the subject has surely encoun-tered the famous refrain: show, don’t tell! I certainly got that comment frequently enough during my days as a.
The hardest thing for a writer is to show not tell - great title, but the author in this slender book has failed completely in showing how it's done. This is my take. Tell: Amber was a /5(6). Improve Your Creative Writing by Using the Show, Don't Tell Technique Using the Show, Don't Tell Technique in Writing Part of the beauty of the written word is that it comes alive on the page to bring a picture or image to the reader's mind.
You’ve heard the classic writing rule, “Show. Don’t Tell.” Every writing blog ever has talked about it, and for good reason. Showing, for some reason, is really difficult.
Four Techniques to Show Rather than Tell. January 30, by Marcy Kennedy • Marcy's Blog, Writing • Tags: linking verbs, Marcy Kennedy, naming character emotions, show vs. tell, showing vs. telling • 32 Comments. By Marcy Kennedy (@MarcyKennedy) You’ve heard the advice show, don’t tell until you can’t stand to hear it anymore.
Yet all of us still seem to struggle with it. "Show, don’t tell" is not a license to overwrite. While researching this article, I came across sample after sample of over-written prose submitted as examples of "showing" writing. Good writing should mix showing and telling.